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Title: Detour This Way
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kaylashay81
Rating: FR13
Disclaimer: I'm not Bellesario or CBS, so I don't claim to own them.
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ncisdrabble100; Challenge #71 - Detour
Timeline: Pre-Series
Word Count: 300
Crossposted:ncisdrabble100; ncis_haven; ncisfanfic
Summary: Every place I’ve ever been was just a detour on my way to someplace new.
Every place I’ve ever been was just a detour on my way to someplace new. After my mother passed away, my father remarried. When that went south, she got the house and we packed our bags to a new house and a new wife. Thinking back on it, I’ve never had a place to call home.
Once I walked out of my father’s world and into college, it was one cramped dorm room after another. Then everything I owned was packed into boxes and taken to a new town and my first apartment. There I became a cop, low man on the totem pole. I thought briefly that I would stay the course, climb the food chain, but I didn’t.
Two years later, the boxes were shuffled to another stopping point in another city. Maybe if I knew what my ultimate goal was, I could reach my destination. But I’ve never figured it out, so I just keep following the broken signs along the road.
Next came Baltimore and I found something I was good at. Every criminal I put behind bars gave me a feeling of accomplishment. I was doing something that made a difference in the world and on the outside, I let that feeling shine in my smile.
But on the inside, I was still lost and the road signs were becoming less clear every day. I didn’t have anyone to share my accomplishments with. I wanted to have that connection to someone, but that someone wasn’t in Baltimore and I didn’t know how to find them.
Then, just after the world had gone to hell with 9/11, there was a flash of a federal badge and a gruff voice saying, “NCIS. This is our scene now.”
“Detour this way,” was what I heard and I smiled.
Author:
kaylashay81Rating: FR13
Disclaimer: I'm not Bellesario or CBS, so I don't claim to own them.
Challenge:
ncisdrabble100; Challenge #71 - DetourTimeline: Pre-Series
Word Count: 300
Crossposted:
ncisdrabble100; ncis_haven; ncisfanficSummary: Every place I’ve ever been was just a detour on my way to someplace new.
Every place I’ve ever been was just a detour on my way to someplace new. After my mother passed away, my father remarried. When that went south, she got the house and we packed our bags to a new house and a new wife. Thinking back on it, I’ve never had a place to call home.
Once I walked out of my father’s world and into college, it was one cramped dorm room after another. Then everything I owned was packed into boxes and taken to a new town and my first apartment. There I became a cop, low man on the totem pole. I thought briefly that I would stay the course, climb the food chain, but I didn’t.
Two years later, the boxes were shuffled to another stopping point in another city. Maybe if I knew what my ultimate goal was, I could reach my destination. But I’ve never figured it out, so I just keep following the broken signs along the road.
Next came Baltimore and I found something I was good at. Every criminal I put behind bars gave me a feeling of accomplishment. I was doing something that made a difference in the world and on the outside, I let that feeling shine in my smile.
But on the inside, I was still lost and the road signs were becoming less clear every day. I didn’t have anyone to share my accomplishments with. I wanted to have that connection to someone, but that someone wasn’t in Baltimore and I didn’t know how to find them.
Then, just after the world had gone to hell with 9/11, there was a flash of a federal badge and a gruff voice saying, “NCIS. This is our scene now.”
“Detour this way,” was what I heard and I smiled.
You rock as always!
Court
Em
And yeah... I think he found where all the detours were leading him.
So, this was amazing as always. I like the use of "detour" and how you had the message repeating through Tony's life.
And then when Gibbs came into his life he changed his ways and suddenly there was a different sign for him to read/follow!!
Yay for Tony!
;-)
I read the challenge and was like 'detour, what could I do with detour?' and bam... :-)
The Tony character just makes my day. :-)
Hee, that's so awesome. Great first person voice, too, and that's not easy to pull off!
So then I spent way too long figuring out how to trim 5-6 words out of my fic. It was agony. But I really, really love the ending on it. :-)
I generally don't do first-person, but I find myself going that route with Tony from time to time. I actually started this in third person, but switched it to first as I wrote the first sentence. I wrote: Every place he's ever been was just a detour on my way to someplace new.
Then I went oops at the my and decided to go first person on it. Glad you liked!
Yeah, I can imagine Tony getting inside your head. He has a very distinctive voice. Hmmmm. And it's weird how stories sometimes just change themselves like that. I find that happens a lot with POV.
What makes it worse is if someone points out a typo or missing word after.
I really love writing Tony. There's so much you can do with him and his 'voice' clicks with me just right.