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Awwww. :(
*snuggles pillow*
I have to say, I read that, then thought, "Wait. There's more to it than that," read it again, and nodded. Second time around, there's more to it than him just thinking about what it would be like to be free. He's actually trying to fight back, but he doesn't know how, or he's just too brainwashed into believing he has no rights and whatnot. (I'm not sure that just made sense.) Loving the tone here - definitely drew me in.
The clinking of chains brought his focus back to the corridor in front of him
I don't know. For some reason, that's my favorite line. It's almost like that's excitement and entertainment for him - it's the only thing worth seeing, so he's going to pay attention to it if it kills him. Loved it. Times a billion. (Falling asleep typing this. Thanks again for the DW!)
*snuggles pillow*
I have to say, I read that, then thought, "Wait. There's more to it than that," read it again, and nodded. Second time around, there's more to it than him just thinking about what it would be like to be free. He's actually trying to fight back, but he doesn't know how, or he's just too brainwashed into believing he has no rights and whatnot. (I'm not sure that just made sense.) Loving the tone here - definitely drew me in.
The clinking of chains brought his focus back to the corridor in front of him
I don't know. For some reason, that's my favorite line. It's almost like that's excitement and entertainment for him - it's the only thing worth seeing, so he's going to pay attention to it if it kills him. Loved it. Times a billion. (Falling asleep typing this. Thanks again for the DW!)